I get insults on any poems and insult about anything.

poetryladycat · Post by **poetryladycat** » Tue Mar 07, 2006 6:01 pm

They insult my poems and because I am copyrighted,
they curse call he not knowing if I am a she plus totally ignorant.

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John-Paul Dardani
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Posted: Mon Mar 06, 2006 5:48 am Post subject:

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Ok for a start, anyone that says their work is copyrighted on here is: a) being pretencious and b) probably lying anyway.

Lori,
Quote:
It is visible to see
is a redundant line because it means "It is see-able to see".

In the third stanza i believe there is a typo: Quote:
plant
should probably be planet.

The fourth stanza is gramatically incorrect. I can't decipher what you intended to say.

In general this has the flavour of a channel five news broadcast. It is unpoetic in that your line breaks are oddly organised and lack rhythm. Furthermore, you simply reel off facts (well, opinions really) leaving nothing to the imagination. Show, don't tell. You are dealing with a grand and much-pondered theme (the state of man), which is very difficult to pull off.

As a positive, the views expressed in the narrative are pessimistic but intelligent and philosophical. I'd like to look at a redraft,

jp

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Posted: Mon Mar 06, 2006 11:41 am Post subject:

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Thank you John and I have allot of copyrighted poetry ask copyright office plus a few published poetry work lol.
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Posted: Mon Mar 06, 2006 6:57 pm Post subject:

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Glad to hear it. Nonetheless, no one wants to steal your work here. Nice to see some of the errors have been corrected.

jp

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I add it to my own poetry websites too. lol.
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Posted: Mon Mar 06, 2006 8:30 pm Post subject: Re: Imperfect World

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Humans have choices. Can they ever choose the good? That's the question we have to ask. And who better than the poets, like you and me and poetryladycat to ask it?

Take away the damage we've done and note some of the good. Mother Theresa holding a dying Indian beggar in her arms just to give a final touch of human love. Bold Christian activists working to outlaw slavery in England and later America. The Alexian Brothers caring for the sick and dying to their own peril during the 1348-49 Black Death.

Forgive me, JP, but what part of this piece did you find intelligent and philosphical?

We look at mankind and say, "Hey! Aren't you suppose to be good?" Well, no! The good man is an aboration. The race does not digress, as the poet suggests, but has always been mean and base. He's having trouble constructing an ethic today (so it looks as though he's lost his moorings), but he had as much trouble constructing an ethic in prehistoric times.

The difference between man and tiger is just this: Man has tried to construct an ethic; the tiger has never bothered. His ethic is driven solely by the pursuit of meat.

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I got an A in history lol.
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My mark was probably a B-, but I remember I had a very, very good history teacher. Spelling is another matter. I think I meant "the good man is an aberation ..."

But if God is unreliable, how can we use words like "good" or "bad" — what standard do we have to base such values upon? Just our own experience? Just our feelings? That's not enough since both are notoriously unreliable. Some people love their neighbors and some people eat them ... is it merely a matter of personal preference?

The poet needs to consider these things if he or she is to be taken seriously by anyone beyond his or her immediate subculture.

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Posted: Tue Mar 07, 2006 7:29 am Post subject:

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RA, i found the fourth stanza to be entirely thought-provoking.
Quote:
You can agree or disagree
Humans always digress,
Because they want to
Control the world and everything on it.

Each couplet of lines makes sense in a new way. Let me ellaborate. Lines one and two (read alone) could mean: People don't always agree. Lines two and three, on the other hand, could mean something entirely different about the nature of man: people turn to baseness and immorality because that is what they ultimately desire. Finally, three and four gives a statement which most people would consider to be true: human's thirst for power over everything (not necessarily in a sinister light).
Obviously, when read together some of these meanings are lost, but i believe that a reading, aloud, would implant these thoughts into the mind of the listener.

In this way, the poem seems more intelligent than perhaps you had allowed for,

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Posted: Tue Mar 07, 2006 12:04 pm Post subject:

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It is visible to see
that your poem is unfiltered shit lol.
This above text is copyright 2006

I don't give a rat's shit that you got an A in history you pretentious prick, you get a z in poetry lol.

espicom · Post by **espicom** » Tue Mar 07, 2006 6:10 pm

You will have to help me here... I do not see anything in your message that resembles a support request for PHPBB software. It looks like you have an issue with the members or owner of a particular website that uses this software, in which case, you're on the wrong site to complain...

LittlemanTAMU · Post by **LittlemanTAMU** » Tue Mar 07, 2006 6:13 pm

Even though this probably shouldn't be in any phpbb forums much less in Support, I'm commenting. It looks to me like you started the whole thing. If you want sympathy, perhaps you can find a more appropriate place to get it than a technical support forum.

Bobble · Post by **Bobble** » Tue Mar 07, 2006 6:17 pm

This topic will get locked so I'll jump in quick.

All written work is covered by copyright. Being copyrighted doesn't make it good. You posted a poem and recieved criticism - and that is all.

It is visible to see?? Sounds like a right stinker!

Black Fluffy Lion · Post by **Black Fluffy Lion** » Tue Mar 07, 2006 6:24 pm

Please clarify exactly what you're trying to get help with or this will be locked...

RichardTaft · Post by **RichardTaft** » Tue Mar 07, 2006 6:29 pm

are you asking how to block the critics?

poetryladycat · Post by **poetryladycat** » Tue Mar 07, 2006 7:47 pm

Any poem I put on the board they insult even if I put love poetry.
I had this poem and this one they insulted me big time on this too.

Friendship, Friend Or Foe
By Lori Triggs
Copyrighted 2005

Friendship, Friend Or Foe

Friends what is that?
True friends would never hurt you,
I have no friends!
So called friends just use you,
till you have nothing left.

I say what are friends?
They suppose to be their for you no matter what
Instead you get a slap on the back,
They tell you to get lost when times get rough.

Why we have friends?
To hear insults?
For your friends to push your buttons!
To hurt your feelings and emotions!
Play with your mind, body even soul!

Well that is not friends?
They are friend or foe?
So are you friend or foe?

So what is friendship!

poetryladycat · Post by **poetryladycat** » Tue Mar 07, 2006 7:49 pm

How can they keep poets if they insult every poet that comes in no matter what they write it just jealousy.

Jim_UK · Post by **Jim_UK** » Tue Mar 07, 2006 7:53 pm

Ok enough is enough.

This is absolutely nothing at all to do with phpBB2 Support.

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Jim

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